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human body is composed of 98% water. I am no exception. My head is full of
water; constantly churning and beating against my mind as thoughts hit its
surface like hail and the currents of my unconsciousness whip up waves from
below. Anger boils the seas into a steamy mess, while sorrow beckons rains
which raise the water level to the top of my skull and I drown inside. Small
sailboats of what I need to get done are sunk and forgotten in the constant
storm. Only in the latest night hours do the mists clear and the waters still;
my brain an island emerging from the day’s chaos. There I drag the bones of
devastated vessels to be mended for the tumult of tomorrow. Some days are more
intense than others. A hurricane of family dispute here, an earthquake of self-doubt
there. The only consistency of my waking hours is mental confusion and
catastrophe.
Fragile
bubbles are formed through my open mouth, many of which pop before they are
ever seen or heard. They are crude, rounded by the world’s expectations and gravitational
pressures. Perhaps someday my bubbles will be cubes, or have the sharp edges of
what I really want to convey; since souls are so hard to penetrate nowadays.
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I relate to this on such a personal level I felt like crying. I feel this everyday and I want to thank you for putting it into words :)
ReplyDeleteI LOVED the first two lines, and the rest was equally amazing <3
ReplyDeleteThis appeals to my kind of writing on so many levels and this is truly one of the best things I've read, oh my gosh please don't stop writing!
ReplyDeleteI love the title
ReplyDeleteI could picture a wild sea crashing against the shore
ReplyDeleteYou have some seriously amazing imagery in here. I can really see what you're talking about. For flash fiction, I've found that sometimes simplifying your words can help make the message a little more clear, but I definitely think the intense imagery you're describing fits.
ReplyDeleteI like how you compared your mind to a body of water and how it reacts with your emotions.
ReplyDeleteFantastic metaphors and imagery.
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ReplyDeleteThis is a beautiful piece. I loved all the water imagery and metaphors you used. It was so very true and just so well-written.
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